The Everlast: Book One
By Jack Kavanagh
*I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a completely honest review*
The plot for this book is pretty decent. It’s a fantasy/supernatural novel involving angels, darkness, attacks on humanity, and more. It is a classic good versus evil type of book with the main character faced with a difficult decision which would ultimately determine the flow of the story. It has the potential to be very good but it’s held back by a list of jarring and sometimes confusing errors, typos, and grammatical mistakes.
The book is written in first person present tense but it often jumps back and forth between present and past tense. It also sometimes switches to third person … but the biggest mistakes are with the dialogue. Some lines are written outside of quotations, in the middle of the conversation, and much of the speech is awkward and out of place. A lot of exchanges are also filled with run-on sentences poorly connected by dashes or misused semi-colons.
Normally, I’m not one to make a big deal out of errors—especially when I know it’s the author’s first book which, in this case, it was. Unfortunately, I found the mistakes in this book so numerous and distracting that I couldn’t even finish the story.
Despite everything I just said, there are some positive notes to this book. The cover, first of all, is amazingly beautiful. It draws you in and definitely portrays the dark yet wonderful world Kavanagh has imagined. I did not finish the story but I did think it was somewhat interesting and with a little editing it could be so much more.
After a bit of revising, I would recommend this story to fantasy readers and supernatural fans. Anyone who likes angels and demons is going to want to give it a try.